How's My Comic Script Translate???
Would appreciate any helpful tips and suggestions based on how it translates to ya. Doesn't have to be a full on finished page or anything like that just a general "what you thought I meant" and then to give me your suggestions afterwards.
If you end up helping me out, if you could post the results here in the forum that'd be great.
For anyone who takes up the script an would like the music that I feel best goes with the scene here's the link: www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZxnqST…
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Beyond The Mirrors Eyes: Page #???? - Chapter ???:
Summary of Page:
Suddenly white mechanical arms fall from the ceiling, creating a translucent half-sphere like structure around the sides of Aaeva. Their robotic fingers, a metallic jet-black and grey, lock in like hands to hold the mysterious half-spheres in place, uprighting her body. The phenomena however goes unnoticed. Aaeva, still unable to move, begins to take in things through her other senses closing her eyes. Focusing on the inner functions of her own new figure.
Narrative/Aaeva: So this is life...
[I've been creating this in google docs so the notes I leave can't be seen but she goes into a Mind Palace, much like what happens in the Television show "SHERKLOCK" Link: www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gz8QbD… - 2:02) for her however her mind palace is just a white spaceless, boundless plane of existence. Because she's unable to move I wanted to express her connecting with her other senses through her mind palace.]
She feels as her artificial heart beats inside her chest; each compression like the last; sending new life and energy over every part of her body. She takes in for the moment the feeling of the air passing in through her nose and into her lungs. Her chest expanding and and compressing as her body continues to be up-righted. It’s then she notices the faint drifting sound of music in her ears. The different instruments and melodies swiveling around her. They're familiar to her, and yet they are foreign to her, so new, so different. This feeling the same for the other senses.
Narrative/Aaeva: It’s Beautiful…
Notes: For this page the utilization of her “Mind Palace” will be essential in expressing her use of her other senses. Since she is transfixed in the confines of the room unable to move it’ll be the job of her mind palace to show readers that she’s getting in tune with her other sense through a physical gesture her mental self does. Such as touching her chest to indicate she’s listening for her heart beat. Or tilting her head to show she’s breathing through her nose with wind blowing her hair to the back of her. The goal is to stray away from having things explained through words and more by actions.
Panel Outline:
The second page will be comprised of Five(5) panels split evenly from the page. The third page will be comprised of Nine(9) panels.
PAGE #02 of 2-3/PANEL #1: Here will be a side shot close-up shot of Aaeva showing from the top of her head down to just about where we’d start to travel down her upper rib cage.
PAGE #2 of 2-3/PANEL #2: We then cut to an undershot of Aaeva that’s almost full body; just below her knees, the feet escaping the readers view. Her hair swirls around and her arms remain outstretched. We see from this undershot view the ceiling of the room open up to see the arms descending down.
PAGE #2 of 2-3/PANEL #3: Now from a horizon shot we see the arms at the side of Aaeva her hair facing the reader as her body lays down flat in the air at a slight down-ward angle, just enough to capture her buttox and upper back.
PAGE #2 of 2-3/PANEL #4: A smaller box (just about 1/8th the size of the above panels) connecting between both the Third(3rd) panel and the Fifth(5th) panel is where the Fourth(4th) panel will lie; more so on the Fourth(4th) panel than the fifth as not to take up to much space in the Fifth(5th). Here we will have the panel split diagonally to show the hands of the machines which are holding the spherical barrier.
PAGE #2 of 2-3/PANEL #5: This panel we’ll have one of the arms in the foreground of the frame/the readers eyes. It’ll be bent at the (elbow) as if grabbing something from off a low standing coffee stand. We’ll capture this at an angle so that we can capture the second arm in the background as well. Aaeva in the middle more progressively upright than the following panels from before with her head tilted up. (Here on this last panel is where we will have Aaeva speaking)
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PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #1: On a black background we'll have a small rectangular box that is all black. This will be the starting of another fading into Aaeva’s Mind Palace.
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #2: A progressive ascension into Aaeva’s mind palace. Going from all black to white.
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #3: Here we see a Close-Up shot of her upper body. Head leaning down with her eyes closed. Her hand placed on her chest (This could be broken into another panel of the shot of her hand on her chest) This will be a thicker rectangular panel.
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #4: It’s here we see Aaeva’s artificial heart beating and pumping through her a white and blue, light liquid. SFX: Bthump Bthump Bthump
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #5: Next we see Aaeva’s head lifted up a smile on her face and her hand on the center of her chest. Her chest puffed up to it’s fullest as she takes in air. Her face is a look of bliss, a look of freedom.
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #6/7: Here we see Aaeva’s lungs taking in air and exhaling it out.PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #8: Here you are free to illustrate the sound of music coming through (I'd suggested melodies or notes starting small and ascending out to cover a part of the page.
PAGE #3 of 2-3/PANEL #9: A picture of Aaevas ear
Pencil Me This (The Pencil Selfie)
Commission Rates Start @ $25 and cover from the head down to just below the shoulders; though should you request a little more body price may range a little higher depending on the picture being sent. For this I will take on 5 slots a week.
1. (Available)
2. (Available)
3. (Available)
4. (Available)
5. (Available)
Also requests like:
"HEY! can ya make me a little more MACHO MAN RANDY SAVAGE-ish"
or
"Can you add this or take away that from me or said picture"
would also incur a price increase depending.
Once a price point is set as well as a payment method (and it's a picture I like A.K.A. don't be afraid to be wacky and send me an interesting picture of you-though nothing to overtly suggestive or sexual) the process begins and you'll receive a digital portrait of yourself once I'm finished
The Don'ts:
Type of emails/photos that will get ignored/thrown out:
-Missing a photo
-Requesting a free sketch
-Asking repeatedly if I'll accept yours
-That want me to agree on a deadline ("Must be done for a birthday, anniversary, live event...")
-Photos of couples or groups (one sketch of one person only)
-Extreme close ups/cropped off foreheads/half of a face
-Blurry, small file, bland compositions, or complicated photos
-Person interacting with other people (This is a special sketch for you, and you alone)
-More than one pet
-Offering DA points (Sorry folks, though this is for fun I can't accept points)
-Art Trades
-Not relating at all to the portraits (This is a commission only for those nothing else)
-You dressed up as a character you like OUTSIDE of the photo A.K.A. if it's not in the photo you send it's not going to be in the drawing I do.
The Do's:
-Will do minor blood or gore (Though not depicting you killing anyone you know halloween is close so it's completely understandable.)
-Scantily Clad/covered up (Again nothing too overtly sexual though (NO SEX/UAL pleasure basically)
-Will do pictures (with no additional cost) of you and your little one in your hands
(If you decide you want a sketch of your little one in the bath with a rubber ducky or things of that sort they will be leafed, HOWEVER I would prefer if ya found and chose pictures where they aren't exposed in an obvious manner.)
-Profanity (i.e. middle fingers and shirts that say F#%* off)
-You in cosplay, though depending on the complexities of the costume it may incur an extra charge.
please do not be offended if I don't ever get back to you. I ask you to be patient as it isn't just you requesting, I spoke a little earlier about if the photo is something I find fun to do, the request is over 48 hours old, working on other projects (I am currently in the middle of starting up a comic project soon called "Beyond The Mirrors Eyes" and that in an of itself is going to take up a lot of time and energy when started. These portraits are when I have time left over in the day to do one or two of them. I do work two jobs during the week.
If you understand and agree with the above an don't mind that there is the possibility you'll never get a response back, can pay with PayPal (do not send a payment until you've been asked to), then do send your commission request for consideration only to my email: I.D.M.Morgan08@Gmail.com
However today I'm in a very good mood an don't mind doing them for as low as $5.00
Usually my prices are from $10 - $15 and I'm usually willing to beat a lot of prices. (I think my work speaks for itself too as far as quality) prices are negotiable and will vary mainly by detail i.e. A black and white picture of a well known character. Pictures will be black and white unless you want them drawn in different colors, but I am unable to do coloring well enough to be an ass enough to charge you for that. So... ask at your own risk.
*Dark Face* BWAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA!!!!
But for now they're just.. Five... Five Dollar, Five Dollar commissionssssss
If you would please leave comments onto the journal here about your interest in commissions. I'll PM you for the details
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Very interested in doing original character work it's quite fun to partake in someone elses style or with their Original Characters. So if you want them drawn or sketched up let me know and we will start something up. I'll start off with a few sketches for what you guys want, or rather outlines once we chose one then we'll go from there. Drawings don't start till at least half the payment is made into my pay-pall account once that's all set and done that's when I can begin working on your request. See everyone's happy then huh?
Anyone looking to really watch work in progress I have my live stream up where I work from. I'll be taking a max of FIVE (5) commission's for now
1. (Open)
2. (Open)
3. (Open)
4. (Open)
5. (Open)
Here is my Main Page Link
IDMMorgan.Deviantart.com
All commissions will be drawn up on my live stream account so you can all watch the progress and see where things are.
www.livestream.com/idmmorgan08…
P.S. I'm actually looking for some artists to team up with in getting mine and your own personal Manga/Graphic-Novel printed. If your interested Inbox me "Artists Collective" as the subject line an I'll give you more details about what I'm trying to do.
Live Stream @I.D.M.Morgan'08'LiveWire
www.livestream.com/idmmorgan08…
Feel free to stop on by, look forward to some company; Really awesome part about it is being able to draw on the big screen over here at my boys and work on it at the same time.
((Commission for anyone still interested are still open; you can reference my last journal for details
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Commissions done at a great price!
Base price is $1 per square inch (i.e a normal size picture drawn on regular printer size paper would cost $9.66)
All pictures will be black and white unless you want them drawn in different colors, but I am unable to do coloring well enough to charge.
I'm willing to beat a lot of prices, and think my work speaks for itself! Again, all prices are negotiable and will vary mainly by detail. A black and white picture of a well known character on a normal size piece of paper would be roughly $10 - $15.
Very interested in doing original character work as well find it quite fun to partake in so anyone with Original Characters they want drawn or sketched up let me know and we will start something up.
I'll start off with a few sketches for what you guys want, or more rather outlines once we chose one then we'll go from there. Drawings don't start till at least half the payment in made into my pay-pall account once that's all set and done that's when I can begin working on your request.
Anyone looking to really watch work in progress I have my live stream up where I work from. I'll be taking a max of TEN commission's for now
1. (Taken)
2. (Open)
3. (Open)
4. (Open)
5. (Open)
6. (Open)
7. (Open)
8. (Open)
9. (Open)
10. (Open)
Here is my Main Page Link
idmmorgan.deviantart.com/
All commissions will be drawn up on my live stream account so you can all watch the progress and see where things are.
www.livestream.com/idmmorgan08…
For me so I can keep track of my Forum...
((forum.deviantart.com/jobs/serv…))
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